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I opened my mouth and coughed out the wings
Throwing up the colors,
From once beautiful things.
They crawl up my throat,
And pry through my teeth,
Revealing the darkness,
I've hid underneath.
Her words echo in my head,
I try to stand.
But fall instead.
They no longer had that fluttery feel.
I guess the love had lost its appeal.
I cough and clutch at the hole in my chest.
Thinking ironically,
Is this just love at its best?

She said she hates the world.
But I know she loves it so,
I have seen her on the hill,
With the evening afterglow.
She feeds them with my beating heart
Enticing them
Like the sweetest tart.
While clutching at the hole in her chest,
Causing them to swarm in unrest.
Their wings are black and broken
Barely there…
Like words unspoken,
They flutter by silently…

She stands atop the hill secluded.
While I watch her from the gate.
Next to the forgotten roads,
In the evening when it's late.
Passed where yellow flowers grow,
With all our secrets kept in the glow.
Across the field of broken hearted tries,
Upon that hill under crying skies.
She sits neglected…
Wrapped up in her lies.
With the broken
Butterflies.
They rumble in my stomach
They flurry all about
And it’s a dreadful feeling
When the butterflies want out…


i have made many variations of this poem( others quite dark and gory) but this is a little more suitable for D.A.
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QueenArtic Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Student Artist
Excellent rap song :D
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JOKER2448 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
This is still as good as the first time i read it!!
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Mierren Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks looks like you finally got your profile up so should we make you a zombie and post it as a deviation for your page?
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JOKER2448 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012
Yes we should
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GeekGirl97 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, great poem. I thing has a lot more than it shows... Perhaps some other ways of interpretation and meanings?

Anyways, very deep and beautifully written :heart:
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Mierren Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
wow thanks! and you are very perceptive
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GeekGirl97 Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks and you are welcome! Haha :heart:
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Laur-icula Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012
This is definitely one of my all time favorite poems. It's so beautifully written, and it's so sad and the reader can interpret a little bit of a different meaning.
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Mierren Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks!
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Laur-icula Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012
You're welcome! :3
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sentientmaster Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hi there, love the poem, but it seemed to me this was like a confession of the guy who did her in, I hope thats the way you put it across as, and if not I live a long way away, cheers, Mike.
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Mierren Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
you sir. are quite perceptive
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sentientmaster Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'll take that as a sigh of relief and a compliment, thank you loved the poem, very dramatic and well written, cheers, Mike.
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theWitchofGrich Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2012
very lovely and very sad :(
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infinitexxx Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
wow, this is stunning!
you have a way with words <3 i love how you took this saying which connotes warmth/happiness and made it gory. great job!
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SubjugatedSandwich Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is simply an excellent piece but I really think the mature content filter is not necessary and it may hinder people from finding this gem of a poem.
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Jiadiss Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012
Now, this is what I like to read! You were very visual in how you presented your thought and your words were chosen well. There were hints of horror, pain, and confusion as you portrayed how you felt towards this person you love. Great work, friend! :clap: :clap: :clap:
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Van-Dunkelschreiber Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love they play on the old saying I have butterflys in my stomach
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