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I opened my mouth and coughed out the wings
Throwing up the colors,
From once beautiful things.
They crawl up my throat,
And pry through my teeth,
Revealing the darkness,
I've hid underneath.
Her words echo in my head,
I try to stand.
But fall instead.
They no longer had that fluttery feel.
I guess the love had lost its appeal.
I cough and clutch at the hole in my chest.
Thinking ironically,
Is this just love at its best?

She said she hates the world.
But I know she loves it so,
I have seen her on the hill,
With the evening afterglow.
She feeds them with my beating heart
Enticing them
Like the sweetest tart.
While clutching at the hole in her chest,
Causing them to swarm in unrest.
Their wings are black and broken
Barely there…
Like words unspoken,
They flutter by silently…

She stands atop the hill secluded.
While I watch her from the gate.
Next to the forgotten roads,
In the evening when it's late.
Passed where yellow flowers grow,
With all our secrets kept in the glow.
Across the field of broken hearted tries,
Upon that hill under crying skies.
She sits neglected…
Wrapped up in her lies.
With the broken
Butterflies.
They rumble in my stomach
They flurry all about
And its a dreadful feeling
When the butterflies want out


i have made many variations of this poem( others quite dark and gory) but this is a little more suitable for D.A.
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QueenArtic Feb 7, 2013  Student Artist
Excellent rap song :D
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:iconjoker2448:
This is still as good as the first time i read it!!
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Mierren Dec 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks looks like you finally got your profile up so should we make you a zombie and post it as a deviation for your page?
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:iconjoker2448:
Yes we should
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GeekGirl97 Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, great poem. I thing has a lot more than it shows... Perhaps some other ways of interpretation and meanings?

Anyways, very deep and beautifully written :heart:
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Mierren Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
wow thanks! and you are very perceptive
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GeekGirl97 Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks and you are welcome! Haha :heart:
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:iconlaur-icula:
This is definitely one of my all time favorite poems. It's so beautifully written, and it's so sad and the reader can interpret a little bit of a different meaning.
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Mierren Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks!
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:iconlaur-icula:
You're welcome! :3
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