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I once had a friend.
That was made of pretend,
Who's only friend was me.
We played all alone,
Just all on our own.
Down on the hills,
And the trees.

We ran through the woods,
Jumped in the hills,
And played in the dark,
Because we lived for the thrills.
We went on our journeys,
And time would stand still.
The world would change,
Because it bowed to our will.

Then came the days…
My friend started to fade.
We no longer spoke,
We just sat in the shade.
And as we sat silent
We looked at the sky .
My friend left for the last time,
Without a goodbye.
I guess the fact is.
They were no longer shy.

I once had a friend,
I thought was made of pretend.
Who supposedly no one could see.
So I sit and I wait,
Pretending their late.
Alone with no guarantee.
Hoping and saying ,
Undoubtedly praying.
The friend,
Of pretend.
Wasn't me.
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mturpin52 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Still moving... no matter how many times I read it... love this...
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ForsakenDreamsTheif Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist
That is very... thought provoking! Wow! I love it! XD
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mturpin52 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
love it!!!
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XxXWiltingVioletXxX Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love the theme! It reminds me of a story I started writing a year or two ago... Great work :)
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Sapafiregirl Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013
STRAIGHT TO FAVS! So much emotion!!!! Awesome poem!
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Mierren Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you!
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theWitchofGrich Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2012
beautiful :D very beautiful :D :D
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Mierren Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
oh thank you very much!
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
great rhythm to this and interesting concept!
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Mierren Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks!
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Sleyf Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I think the idea is brilliant, and I do love the rhythm of it. It makes for such a great little read and the end stanza makes the entire thing :D
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Mierren Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks
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Sleyf Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome
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MaddenedHatter Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student Writer
I will admit, I'm not usually into the repetition style you used, but the theme and conclusion of this poem completely turned me around. Well done!
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Mierren Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks!
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KittySib Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love your poem! It is made of Awesome!:D
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Mierren Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you!
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KittySib Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
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Van-Dunkelschreiber Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
hey if I was an imaginary friend I would take full advatage of it
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Mierren Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
lol. theres a lot of hidden potential in that isn't there
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Van-Dunkelschreiber Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
yep
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flashingnumbers Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I can't decide if the poem or the concept itself is more amazing. Wonderful!
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Mierren Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
i'm more in favor of the concept.
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flashingnumbers Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
The concept is pretty amazing. There's a lot you could do with it. :)
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Mierren Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
agreed im hoping others will use it too
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poeticjunk Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
Amazing poem really well thought out and very clever.
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Mierren Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks
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silvergabetha834 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Professional General Artist
I didn't quite get it until I read your artist's comment. Once I got it, it was really cool.
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Mierren Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks
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ameliaparcel Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
This is one of the most wonderful things I've ever read. And I've read a lot. Truly beautiful, and touches deep. You, my friend, are gifted.
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Mierren Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you
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TypingTurtle Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Broke my heart..Wonderful writing, you pass the feelings exactly as you wish to.
Proud to be your watcher :heart:
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Mierren Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
haha! thanks a lot typing turtle
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TypingTurtle Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Call me Titi :happybounce:
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EpicnessOfArt Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012
This is a beautiful poem. I'm crying!
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Mierren Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
aww thanks!
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