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I once had a friend.
That was made of pretend,
Who's only friend was me.
We played all alone,
Just all on our own.
Down on the hills,
And the trees.

We ran through the woods,
Jumped in the hills,
And played in the dark,
Because we lived for the thrills.
We went on our journeys,
And time would stand still.
The world would change,
Because it bowed to our will.

Then came the days…
My friend started to fade.
We no longer spoke,
We just sat in the shade.
And as we sat silent
We looked at the sky .
My friend left for the last time,
Without a goodbye.
I guess the fact is.
They were no longer shy.

I once had a friend,
I thought was made of pretend.
Who supposedly no one could see.
So I sit and I wait,
Pretending their late.
Alone with no guarantee.
Hoping and saying ,
Undoubtedly praying.
The friend,
Of pretend.
Wasn't me.
Looking back this started out with just a brilliant theme. But now I really enjoy it this poem is quite childish my words are mediocre and gives off the feeling of being messy and unfinished. It is only until you read the very last words that you comprehend the full poem. Now like most of my poems I did draw a picture to go with this. Of a small child alone on a hill under a tree with the knees tucked to the chin the shade of the tree hiding any real recognizable features leaving the child sad, alone and giving it the appearance of almost fading away. But I couldn't do it the picture was too sad. So I leave you with the words. Please let me know what you think.
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mturpin52 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Still moving... no matter how many times I read it... love this...
ForsakenDreamsTheif Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist
That is very... thought provoking! Wow! I love it! XD
mturpin52 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
love it!!!
XxXWiltingVioletXxX Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love the theme! It reminds me of a story I started writing a year or two ago... Great work :)
Sapafiregirl Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013
STRAIGHT TO FAVS! So much emotion!!!! Awesome poem!
Mierren Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you!
theWitchofGrich Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2012
beautiful :D very beautiful :D :D
Mierren Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
oh thank you very much!
0hgravity Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
great rhythm to this and interesting concept!
Mierren Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
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